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Writer Pilgrim by So Elite's avatar

The last three lines are what make this poem. Between the four walls one is the foundation that will hold or break it apart. Thank you!

man of aran's avatar

Thank you, Pilgrim!

Jody Braverman's avatar

Oooof! Looking forward to seeing where you go with this

man of aran's avatar

Thanks, Jody!

Ronald Drimmel's avatar

Admit it: The last stanza was inspired.

man of aran's avatar

Ha. If you must know, the ‘sea of troubles’ was a late addition because it was feeling flat to me. So a bit of struggle there that resolved well I think. Thanks so much!

Escape Artist Poetry's avatar

Oh man, if you ever wrote a better poem than this one please give me some titles I want to read them

man of aran's avatar

So thank you Mr. Angel for such compliments you’ve given this poem, including inspiring one of your own! I am humbled, and don’t really know how to answer. A better poem? All I can say to that is I have some favourites, but maybe not because I think they are better, I don’t know about that, the reasons are just personal. Anyway, I appreciate the request and will DM you a few links in due course.

Escape Artist Poetry's avatar

Would love to read your favorites, so don’t forget please!

Thomas Rist's avatar

I used to live in Stratford-upon-Avon. At the Swan Theatre, the first in the UK to recreate the Elizabethan jutting stage, I was often spat on in the front row. Swords sometimes felt uncomfortably close to eyes too.

man of aran's avatar

Wow. I guess one could say the Elizabethan theatre had a second, third AND fourth wall! Would love to take it in myself.