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K Mc Questen's avatar

That was delightful.

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man of aran's avatar

Thanks so much, K!

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Luca Spinelli's avatar

Thank you Alan!

I really enjoyed it.

Have a nice day.

Luca 😊

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man of aran's avatar

I definitely will, Luca! You as well. And thank you for sharing my poem. Glad you enjoyed.

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Richard Blaisdell's avatar

A-ha. The curtain rises. Fourth wall broken.

Scene photo-canvas lifts my eyes to hear aria’s low

Baritone breeze to love the British centimeter accent that pleases my heart.

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Writer Pilgrim by So Elite's avatar

Thank you for introducing me to Tony and the word ha-ha! Your poem takes us on a walk with this distinguished English couple. How did you know she studies John Constable? I was thinking their chairs do not match their outfits… hahaha but a picnic is a holy ritual and I love tge way you’ve portrayed it in this poem!

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man of aran's avatar

Yes, the chairs, of course. I tried to fit them in, but somehow couldn’t. As for Constable, that was a liberty, my own narrative layer. Thanks for reading and sharing, Pilgrim!

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Writer Pilgrim by So Elite's avatar

It’s impossible to fit it all in. You did a great job here. Thanks again!

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C.J. Heck's avatar

This is clever, Man. I enjoyed your humor.

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man of aran's avatar

Thank you CJ. So glad it worked for you.

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Malcolm J McKinney's avatar

I like the subtle image of how the black and white behind the man and the all black behind the woman add to the total effect.

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man of aran's avatar

Interesting observation, Malcolm!

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Jack Bishop's avatar

My primary school had a ha-ha at the end of the playing field. You can imagine the kind of things it did for a child's imagination.

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man of aran's avatar

Ah yes, the effect of the ‘hidden’. Thanks for reading, Jack!

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David Angel's avatar

My eye grazes magnetically over this bofine poem! Biscuit soporific - don't be surprised if I lift it!

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man of aran's avatar

Ha ha, go for it!

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David Angel's avatar

Thanks Alan! Just did

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Nan Newton's avatar

We live on a ranch in Montana, and while reading "haha" (which in other contexts, I use possibly too much in texts and emails to dampen the seriousness of what I am attempting to express), I was imagining how we might have such a picnic on our land, surrounded by a few horses, with mountains in the background, in a field covered with sage. Which book would I be reading, which wine drinking, and with which of my husbands would I be sharing this picnic? I am so happy I stumbled onto your Substack just now. It sailed

me to other worlds.

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man of aran's avatar

Thanks, Nan, and welcome! Montana is spectacular, took a brief jaunt through it once.

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Patris's avatar

Caught by the image, the incongruity of the setting v. the human subjects. The pungent scent of a well used pasture following…. But underscoring it all the short life of a young man with a great ‘eye’. Our loss.

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man of aran's avatar

Yes, very true. Thank you for your thoughts, Patris.

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Weston Parker's avatar

Those are all yearlings for sure and there might be a running trough running through it all, two things that would give the couple some peace. Very fun, thanks

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man of aran's avatar

Thanks, Wes! You can indeed see it if you look closely. I only learned the term from an online description of the photo.

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Brent Daniel Schei/Hagen's avatar

An ironic connection, Ray-Jones' photo was the same year of The Kinks Are the Village Green Preservation Society; Ray Davies lyrics play very much with the ideas of memory and capturing those memories through photography or trying to hold onto them in a rapidly changing time. It's really a fantastic album.

I'd also read about the ha-ha but forgotten about it until reading your piece, man of aran. Thanks for the reminder! Ha, and another ha to you, sir!

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man of aran's avatar

Ah, the Kinks, great band, I’ll have to give that one a listen. I’m impressed that you knew what a ha-ha is! Thanks for coming by, Brent.

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Brent Daniel Schei/Hagen's avatar

It’s only by chance that I happened to have read about ha-has in recent years; my work (for a textbook company) often allows me time to do general research and reading to find interesting topics to write about. the ha-ha just happened to be one of them. I had entirely forgotten about them until I read your piece. Cheers, man of aran! See you around the ‘stacks!

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man of aran's avatar

Definitely!

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Poetry Kitt's avatar

Nice! and yes , the artifice of hidden segregation and a way to keep the wild vermin (deer) from ruining the garden. Tempting to consider this theme in the context of elements of American enslavement culture. Thanks💪👍

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