Agreed. Though sometimes I like the ones that kind of end abruptly, without much of a specified conclusion. Kind of like real life: all your memories always end at the present moment.
I just have to add: it's been a week since you wrote this comment, and I've thought of it several times in that span. You are so right that a poem's ending is quite tricky, and quite important. I've significantly changed the endings of a few of my poems due to your input and how it's made me reconsider (all in a very good way, of course). Thanks for being a powerful and inspirational force for creativity.
That was my impression, too. When I came across this piece, it was familiar, but I hadn’t heard her name before. I soon found she has a quite large body of unique, fantastical work. Will definitely be returning to it.
You have a great way with last stanzas.
So glad you think so. Ending a poem is the hardest thing.
Agreed. Though sometimes I like the ones that kind of end abruptly, without much of a specified conclusion. Kind of like real life: all your memories always end at the present moment.
I just have to add: it's been a week since you wrote this comment, and I've thought of it several times in that span. You are so right that a poem's ending is quite tricky, and quite important. I've significantly changed the endings of a few of my poems due to your input and how it's made me reconsider (all in a very good way, of course). Thanks for being a powerful and inspirational force for creativity.
Very eloquent. Love what you’ve done with lowercase, line length, lack of punctuation, and stanza shape.
Thank you Mike. I don’t always make that choice. Happy it works for you!
Text matters! It's all part of the art and the artist's choices.
very interesting.
Thanks, Weston!
Nice cadence in that last stanza.
What a nice ending!
Shades will persist in memory. They don’t leave, just move into the corners.
Remedios is such an underrated artist
That was my impression, too. When I came across this piece, it was familiar, but I hadn’t heard her name before. I soon found she has a quite large body of unique, fantastical work. Will definitely be returning to it.
There is this play, by Evgeny Shwartz...it's called "The Shadow"...your poem reminded me of it...the premise...
thank you
That’s interesting. I’m not familiar with it. I’ll have to check it out. Thank you for reading!